I took this up as a challenge, and it's harder than it looks! I think the problem is that there are two separate things going on, and it's hard to put them together seamlessly. I had to cheat to get this:
Flame-haired Jane Leslie, submerged up to her breasts in the forest pool, had waited all winter for this first spring dip, and she shivered deliciously at the feel of icy water on her skin (like the forest creatures with whom she was able to communicate -- animals trusted her and came to her hand without fear because of her special gift).
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Date: 2006-05-10 06:52 pm (UTC)Flame-haired Jane Leslie, submerged up to her breasts in the forest pool, had waited all winter for this first spring dip, and she shivered deliciously at the feel of icy water on her skin (like the forest creatures with whom she was able to communicate -- animals trusted her and came to her hand without fear because of her special gift).